100 word challenge ( persuasive)

It just doesn’t make sense…

I am writing this to you just to let you know that the story you had made didn’t make sense to all of us. Why would the balloon kick the frightening brown? And most importantly, what are they anyway? Mr Lynam, if I was you, I would change it to a sentence that can make more sense. Mr Lynam, you’re an adult. You should know more grammar. How would those poor kids even learn about that anyway? I’d be extremely pleased if you changed it into The balloon NEVER kicked the frightening brown.

From Allyson

I lost my Homework ( story)

 

I get my bag and ran downstairs. After I reached down the end of the staircase, I ran. I was late for school but just forgot something. I told my mom “ Where’s my homework!”. No answer except the sound of cars. I forgot that I was home alone, with my little brother. “ Have you seen my homework anywhere?!”

“ Yeah, well check on your desk. It might be there,” My brother replied. I rushed over to my desk. It wasn’t there.

“ What about under your bed?,” I tumbled and looked under. Nothing.

“ But where did it go?” I shouted. I panicked. I’m late