100 word challenge ( persuasive)

It just doesn’t make sense…

I am writing this to you just to let you know that the story you had made didn’t make sense to all of us. Why would the balloon kick the frightening brown? And most importantly, what are they anyway? Mr Lynam, if I was you, I would change it to a sentence that can make more sense. Mr Lynam, you’re an adult. You should know more grammar. How would those poor kids even learn about that anyway? I’d be extremely pleased if you changed it into The balloon NEVER kicked the frightening brown.

From Allyson

3 thoughts on “100 word challenge ( persuasive)”

  1. Allyson,
    Students in my class are writing persuasive pieces right now. I like how you used the prompt this week in a letter to the teacher to discuss the flaws in their writing, and persuade them to improve. What a clever piece! Keep writing.
    Mrs. G., Team 100, Guilderland, NY, USA

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